Kull
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Superb job! Not to take anything away from the awesomeness of your effort, but here's a number of grammar/typo/format issues: 1) In section 3.1 there are three typos on page 20. In the "Pools" (Acitive), "Pop-up" (informataion), and "Supply Source" (raihead) sections. 2) In section 4.2 there's a mangled explanatory sentence in the "Freeze Inactive Units" segment on page 32: ("Check units the should be frozen are") 3) In section 5.1.4 (page 37) two words don't have a space between them in the "Show Air Doctrine Screen" segment: (screenaccessed) 4) In section 5.1.5 (page 37) the letter "C" in the "City Name" segment title is not bold font. 5) In section 5.3.9 (page 48), the first sentence needs a space between "mode" and "(16.3)" 6) In section 5.3.9.1 (page 48), there's a typo in the first sentence: (aidrop) 7) In section 5.3.9.3 (page 49), there's a typo in the Game Play tip: (simialr) 8) In section 5.4.3.2 (page 54), the 2nd sentence of the "Units" segment is a bit mangled: ("For everything else else in the special section and will always display zeros.") 9) In section 5.4.10 (page 61), the sentence comprising the 3rd from last bullet is a bit mangled: ("Total number of men lost and sorted by how there where lost.") 10) In section 5.4.12.1 (page 62), there's a typo in the last sentence: (Finaly) 11) In section 5.4.15 (page 67), there's a missing word in the Game Play tip: ("There should never be a zero (in) the AVL column...") 12) In section 5.4.18 (page 71) the second letter in the 3rd segment title should not be capitalized: (WIthdraw) 13) In section 5.4.18 (page 71) there's a typo in the "Group Range" segment: (umlimited) 14) In section 5.4.25 (page 75) there's a typo in the "ADMIN COST (MAX)" segment: (equivelent) 15) In section 5.4.26.1 (page 76) there's a duplicate "of" in the second paragraph: ("The minimum requirement is 1 for each of of them") 16) All the 6.2.2 subheadings are capitalized except "Major City" (page 83) 17) In section 7.5.3.1 (page 91) there's a typo in the 2nd sentence of the "Rifle Corps" segment: (rfle) 18) In section 7.5.3.3 (page 92) there's a duplicate "that" in the "Game Play Info" section: ("...and cavalry corps is that that tank/mech corps have...") 19) In section 7.7.6 (page 99), there's a few sentences with space issues involving the dates in parens, specifically the 3rd bullet {Belorussian Front( 4/44)}, 5th bullet {Ukrainian Front(10/43)} and the 11th bullet {Ukrainian Front(10/43)} 20) In section 8.1.4.1 (page 101) there's a pair of typos in the 10th bullet (FAGr) description: (Longe) and (Reconaissance) 21) In section 8.1.4.2 (page 102) there's a typo in the 2nd-to-last bullet (ORAP) description: (Reconaissance) 22) In section 8.1.6 (page 103) there's a typo in the 1st paragraph: (umlimited) 23) In section 8.2.1 (page 104) there's a duplicate "used" in the 2nd paragraph: ("...the latter are only used used to conduct...") 24) In section 9.1.2 (page 107) a word in the last sentence of the 2nd paragraph should be plural: (increase(s)) 25) In section 10.1 (page 111) there's a minor grammar issue with the 4th sentence: ("...with the except(ion) of frozen non-combat units...") 26) In section 11.1.3 (page 112) the last sentence has what should be a single word separated by a space: (cann ot) 27) In section 11.2.5 (page 113) there's a missing word in the last sentence of the 1st paragraph: ("...while (a) leader’s infantry skill will...") 28) In section 11.5 (page 115) the last sentence has a space between the final word and the period: ("way .") 29) In section 14.1.5 (page 122) the sentence in the 1st column of the 7th row of the table (on this page) needs a space between a word and the open paren: ("river(in") 30) In section 14.1.5 (page 122) there's a typo in the 2nd sentence of "Note 6": (freindly) 31) In section 14.2.2.4 (page 124) "of" should replace "or" in the "Game Play Tip" section: ("...the same shade (or) red as that...") 32) In section 14.2.3.2 (page 125) there are two periods at the end of the last sentence in the "Game Play Tip" section: ("in that zone..") 33) In section 15.3.1.1 (page 128) there is a typo in the first sentence of the "Game Play Tip" section: (Desne) 34) In section 15.3.2.1 (page 129) there is a typo in the last sentence of the 2nd paragraph: (etrenchment) 35) In section 15.3.2.5 (page 130) the acronym CLV is incorrectly rendered twice as "CVL" in the 2nd paragraph 36) In section 15.3.2.6 (page 131) a word in the 1st paragraph should be plural: ("The modifier(s) are fort level...") 37) In section 15.6.1 (page 134) there is a typo in the last sentence of the 3nd paragraph: (targetted) 38) In section 15.6.2.5 (page 136) a word in the 2nd paragraph should be plural: ("...as it not only reflect(s) losses suffered...") 39) In section 15.7 (page 136) there's a duplicate "and" in the 1st paragraph: ("...Report and and Battle Locator...") 40) In section 15.7 (page 137) there should be a space between two sentences in the 1st paragraph (of this page): ("...and defender.Using the...") 41) In section 15.7 (page 137) a word in the 2nd paragraph (of this page) should be plural: ("These battle result(s) are what ...") 42) In section 15.8.3 (page 139) there is a typo in the 2nd bullet: (Bunus) 43) In section 15.8.4 (page 139) there's a missing word in the 2nd-to-last sentence of the "Game Play Info" section: ("...still has (a) chance of reducing fort levels..") 44) In section 16.1 (page 143) a word in the 1st sentence of the 2nd paragraph should be plural: ("Certain air mission(s) require...") 45) In section 16.3.1 (page 147) the word "of" should be removed from the last sentence of the 2nd paragraph: ("all separate (of) from each other") 46) In section 16.3.2 (page 147) "air mission" and "escort mission" should be plural (1st paragraph). 47) In section 16.3.2 (page 147) the word "an" should be removed from the last sentence of the 2nd paragraph: ("...sometimes get (an) attack bonuses when attacking...") 48) In section 16.3.5 (page 149) there are two typos in the 4th paragraph (both the same word): (substracted) 49) In section 16.3.5 (page 149) there's a typo in the 1st sentence of the "Game Play Tip" section: ("...a computer glitch w(h)ere transports that...") 50) In section 16.3.5 (page 149) there's a grammar issue with the 2nd sentence of the "Game Play Tip" section: ("The order in which you carry mission is the important factor as follows") 51) In section 16.3.6 (page 150) the opening word of the 2nd sentence of the 1st paragraph should be capitalized: ("...at least 2000. (T)he number of...") 52) In section 16.4 (page 151) the letter "F" in the "Fighter and Night Fighter Intercept" segment title is not bold font. 53) In section 17.1.2 (page 153) a word in the 3rd sentence should be plural: ("When partisan(s) attack rail...") 54) In section 18 (page 154) there are two typos in the 1st sentence ("euipment" & "acitive") and a repeat of the "euipment" typo in the "Active/Production Pool" section. 55) In section 18.1.5.3 (page 157) there should be a space between two words in the 1st sentence: ("upto") 56) In section 18.2.1 (page 158) there's a grammar/typo issue with the 1st sentence in the 2nd bullet: ("Segment B deals with those unit(s) that are considered to be in a permanent refit state as far a(s) replacements go.") 57) In section 18.2.1 (page 159) there's a typo in the 3rd sentence of the "Game Play Note" section: (untill) 58) In section 18.2.1.3 (page 160) there's a typo in the 1st sentence of the "Game Play Tip" section: (suppport) 59) In section 18.2.1.3 (page 160) there's a grammar issue with the last sentence of the "Game Play Tip" section: ("This change will also allow (you?) to see emergency conversion of support squads to rifle squads more often.") 60) In section 18.2.2.1 (page 161) a word in the 3rd sentence of the 1st paragraph should be plural: ("It represent(s) the process of upgrading...") 61) In section 18.2.2.2 (page 162) there is one typo in the last sentence of the 5th paragraph ("Pirority") and another in the first sentence of the 6th paragraph ("aslo") 62) In section 18.3 (page 163) there's a repeat of the same grammar/typo issue identified in #56 above, affecting the 1st sentence in the 2nd bullet: ("Segment B deals with those unit(s) that are considered to be in a permanent refit state as far a(s) replacements go.") 63) In section 18.3 (page 163) there's a duplicate "mode" at the start of the 3rd paragraph: ("Refit mode mode has no effect on TOE limits.") 64) In section 19.1.4 (page 166) there's a misplaced apostrophe in the 1st sentence of the 2nd paragraph: ("...within that countrys’ borders.") 65) In section 20.1 (page 169) there's a missing space between "20.1" and the title text "The Supply Grid" 66) In section 20.1.2 (page 170) there's a typo in the last sentence of the 1st "Game Play Tip" section: ("....but other factors m(a)y change this.") 67) In section 20.1.6.1 (page 172) there's a typo in the title of the "Game Play Tip" section: ("Game P(l)ay Tip") 68) In section 20.4.3.2 (page 177) there's a grammar issue with the last sentence of the 1st paragraph: ("...used to calculate(d) the supplies and fuel...") 69) In section 20.6 (page 178) there's a grammar issue with the 1st paragraph: ("...and fully resupply (an) attached units...") 70) In section 20.6 (page 178) there's a typo in the 1st sentence of the 2nd paragraph: (Builduup) 71) In section 21.1.3.1 (page 181) a word in the 1st sentence of the 1st paragraph (of this page) should be plural: ("Some ground element(s) have a build cost...") 72) In section 21.1.8 (page 182) there's a grammar issue with the 1st sentence of the 2nd bullet: ("As an upgrade(d) to an existing type of factory.") 73) In section 21.1.9.1 (page 183) there's a grammar issue with the 1st sentence of the 1st paragraph: ("w(h)ere 100% of the country’s manpower production goes.") 74) In section 21.1.12 (page 184) there's a typo in the 2nd sentence of the 1st paragraph: ("bar(r)ing other restrictions") 75) In section 21.2.1.1 (page 186) there's a typo in the 2nd paragraph (Starlingrad) 76) In section 22.3.4 (page 192) there's a double open paren in the 3rd sentence: (( 77) In section 22.3.5 (page 193) there are several typos/grammar issues in the "Game Play Tip" section. The section title (Gamepay tip), two in the first sentence ("arround" & "benifits"), and grammar issues in the second sentence ("...will be reduce(d) to 36%(.) of it's original value.") 78) In section 23.3.1 (page 194) there's a typo in the 2nd sentence of the 4th bullet: (unitl) 79) In section 25.2 (page 200) there's a typo in the last sentence of the 3rd paragraph (on this page): (...ever seen a better wargamer name tha(n) that?") 80) In section 26.3.4.1 (page 208) the last sub-heading section (titled "Trvl (Travel):") has reversed the bolding (the title should be bold and the description not bold) 81) In section 26.3.4.2 (page 209) there's a typo in the last sub-heading section (titled "Disband:"): (orivided ) that?") 82) In section 26.3.7 (page 210) the 1st sub-heading section (titled "Name:") has reversed the bolding (the title should be bold and the description not bold) 83) In section 26.3.7 (page 210) the title of the 2nd sub-heading section ("Nat (Nationality):") should be in bold font. 84) In section 26.4.1 (page 212) the 1st and 2nd paragraphs should be combined (appears to be an accidental break in the middle of a sentence) 85) Same issue with the 4th paragraph of 26.4.1.4 (page 214) 86) Same issue with the 2nd paragraph of 26.4.2.3 (page 215) 87) Same issue with the 1st paragraph of 26.4.2.6 (page 216) 88) Same issue with the 7th paragraph of 26.4.2.9 (page 218)
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