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ORIGINAL: Shannon V. OKeets quote:
ORIGINAL: mlees Steve. In post #743, the description of the USS Arizona, the text states quote:
The Arizona's air warning went off at approximately 0755, and at 0800 she was hit by the first Japanese bomb, which caused only minor damage. But only 6 minutes later, at 0806 she was hit 1) The time is stated twice for the same event. "6 minutes later" and "0806"... Redundant? (Minor nit pick.) 2) What does "the first Japanese bomb" statement mean? The first weapon dropped by the Japanese in the overall attack (which I believe is incorrect), or the first to hit the Arizona? In either case, that statement could be dropped as unneeded extra info. May I suggest "The Arizona's air warning went off at approximately 0755, and at 0806 she was hit by a bomb that detonated in an ammunition chamber, destroying the forward section of the ship and ignited fires that raged for two days." I realise that neither of these two nit picks have much to do with the game engine itself... sorry. Carry on. Greyshaft did the text. I'll let him answer your query. Ah yes Steve, the well known Arizona fighter-bomber The reason for the naval units having an somewhat ackward english language is that on some ships I have books translated into norwegian. This means that I'll read something in norwegian, and since I am then in a "norwegian state of mind" I tend to formulate my sentences in norwegian and then translate into english, something that does not always work out too well Which is why of course I told Steve that my writing would indeed need quite a bit of proofreading. So please do not hesitate to post about it when you see something ackward about my sentences.
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